Summertime, my first take

[tytlfamily]

Hello folks, still lurking and learning from this great forum. A
version of summertme, all critiques welcome please!
[YOUTUBE]http://youtu.be/Nt8mxKrHO9Q[YOUTUBE]

http://youtu.be/Nt8mxKrHO9Q

tytl

[abdke99]

love it, love the sound also, nothing to get critical about

all the best Kerim

[tytlfamily]

Hey, thank you so much!

[augusjazz]

like it, good sound and good phrasing.

[Dad3353]

Originally Posted by tytlfamily

...all critiques welcome please!...

Good evening, tytl...

It's always a tad delicate replying honestly and candidly to such requests, without seeming harsh, but I'll try (as you asked...). First of all, congratulations, you come through very well, with an excellent quality of recording, spot-on amp settings (although the slight tremolo is a 'cheat'..!), a good backing track and a fine guitar. Overall, you're doing just fine.
It seems that, although you claim to be newly arrived to jazz, you have already a fair 'baggage' on the guitar. This is what I found to be the most distracting, as you seem to be using a fair number of 'stock' techniques from your past playing. Nothing inherently wrong with that (I'm very far from being a jazz 'purist' myself...), but I get the impression that you're leaning on those licks, rather than really expressing what's in the music around. I would recommend slowing down those trilly hammer-ons and short, stock, runs, and working out a more structured 'melodic' approach. (There, you see how this can come across as pompous, harsh, unfeeling criticism..? Only you know what you want to play; who am I to disagree..?) I simply find that there's a certain 'stilted' load of fingering going on, and would have appreciated less speed and licks, and more 'thought'.
OK, I'll stop, although the damage has been done and I've offended a fellow learner who has already more under his fingers than I have managed in 40 years (but then again, I'm slow...).
No, really, you're doing fine, it's just that I'm somewhat clumsy in my ignorant appraisal. Forget I said anything. Ignore this post.
I'll get my coat now...
(sounds of door quitely closing over fading mutterings..."Well he did ask for criticism. I tried, really I did...")

[brwnhornet59]

Hey man good job. Keep up the good work.

A few things I would mention.

#1 You could swing more. Keep your foot tapping on 2 and 4.

#2 Get behind the beat a little more.

#3 It seems like you are running scales more than developing motif. I think if you took the time to let you phrasing develop, you would be having a more natural conversation that you can enjoy.

#4 I would like to hear some melodic minor in there. Harmonic minor fits well in a few spots as well.

Overall you are are a nice path. Keep the videos coming.

[tytlfamily]

Thank you all for your comments. Dad3353, yes thank you
For your constructive critique....... I do appreaciate
It very much.



Brownhornet, yes great observations as well. Not really
Sure where/how to apply the melodic or harmonic
Scales yet though! Have been working on arps though instead
Of scales.