New Composition - Behind The Scene

[myjazzart]

As usually id like to shere my music with other muscians.
I would be grateful,as usually, for any comments, opinions. About tune, about sound.

Mp3 & Score
Behind The Scene | My JazzArt



I recorded this tune with the same equipment as previously recorded Italian Island.

Recorded on:Ibanez JSM 100VT, Yamaha SLG-100S. Accoustic amp Martinello
+Boss chorus

[Philco]

Hi Marek, really nice melody you've got going there. Such a strong and haunting hook. Something special about that.

The whole piece works as is but I would love to hear that theme developed over some other changes, being careful not to lose the magic.
Perhaps bring that melody on a journey that will peak before you come back to the Bm and give us that hook again.
Just one more surprise in the piece to balance the Bbm modulation.

One way to work it would be to approach it as a Bossa.....just to workshop it........I know that sounds strange.
2 reasons.
1 Give yourself a rest from the haunting mood (you might wear it out or it may lead you to a dead end)
2 Ask yourself "what would Jobim have done with this?"

It may head you into some other changes that would suggest a place to go.
Then bring it back to your original feel and see if those changes work.

But if you left it as it is it still works beautifully.
Thanks for sharing.

[myjazzart]

Thanks for listening my music and creative opinion.
I agree that this tune need more changes, maybe I should add bridge, something like that. Im thinking about it.

>>it as a Bossa.
You are right, this tune sounds like bossa. I have never thought about this tune it this way. It opens new doors.

Im going to work with this tune, and rewrite it. When i finish I will post it. We will see what happen.

Thanks again, especially for bossa suggestion

[Kman]

Pretty cool and I think it would sound even better with some bass and drums.