original composition

musiclover312 · #1 06-12-2011, 10:47 AM

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=c9OaqGsrstU

please rate suggestions ,criticism , feedback and comments

jeff above video now goes witn standard tuning

FatJeff · #2 06-12-2011, 11:17 AM

I'll comment. Please don't take anything I say as a criticism ... anyone who posts their playing here is very brave and I applaud them!

First things first...tune your guitar! It's hard to listen to when one of your strings (the high E) is noticeably flat. And all of your strings are about a half-step down from standard tuning.

Compositionally, I don't particularly like the sound of the open E against the Bm ... that makes for an 11th sound that can work well in minor, but for whatever reason, here it's not working very well.

I like the part at around 0:25 when you move to different positions on the fretboard...it makes for a nice transition.

Looks like your technique is mostly derived from the classical tradition, which is a good thing. I am willing to bet that this song sounds a lot better on a nylon string guitar. Have you tried it on one?

Overall, great effort, and definitely keep on practicing!

musiclover312 · #3 06-12-2011, 12:27 PM

hey jeff thanks i deliberately tuned it half step down to from E to D#

must say u have great ear spotting that one i 'd definitely try it out on standard tuning while playing this one ... its just i had this melody going in my mind for last two days so put this across for all u talended guys to advice and comment

nopes i didnt try it yet on nylon guitar .... and yeah i m more drawn towards classical stuff

btw i am a IT programmer in french organization and music has always been my passion so apart from my day i spent all my time on it

thanks again for ur wise comments

mr. beaumont · #4 06-12-2011, 12:27 PM

This would be my exact advice, to the letter. Well said, Jeff.

FatJeff · #5 06-12-2011, 12:46 PM

BTW, if you are interested in composition (songwriting), taking a class or doing some self-study on classical harmony would be a great idea. I have to say that the first year of music theory for me (which focused on harmony and counterpoint) were very eye-opening (or, ear-opening I guess you could say). It completely changed the way that I think about and listen to songs.

mr. beaumont · #6 06-12-2011, 01:23 PM

Just so you know, we're not talking about having a string tuned down a half step...that guitar is out of tune.

If it says it's in tune with a tuner, it needs a setup. Some very sour notes there.

Many classical guitarists will tune to the piece--so if they know there's a place where their guitar is not perfect and it's a note they need for a piece, they'll "temper" the tuning accordingly.

musiclover312 · #7 06-12-2011, 01:41 PM

hey guys check this out with standard tuning

YouTube - ‪First love( original composition)‬&rlm;

musiclover312 · #8 06-12-2011, 01:43 PM

appreciate ur feedback